And then a fleeting shaft of sunlight fell upon the nave.

I get the feeling I've had deja vu before.
So, I just reviewed this song, the only difference betwixt the two being that the words have turned into lyrics here. Many of the things I wrote in the first review apply here but, surprisingly, the presence of a singer has improved it.
There's much more of a musical atmosphere, greater warmth and a feeling of emotion. Even though it's actually more chaotic all round.
The voice has a pleasing sound, warts an' all, and when freed from the contraints of speech, much more expressive. It also ties up more neatly at the end and feels shorter.
I can begin to tune in on this one.
Much more better.